http://bloose09.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] bloose09.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] timelord1 2011-12-19 04:49 am (UTC)

Wow, what a chapter. I like how John wins over Jackie with his inventiveness. John and Rose's stroll around the town was nicely done. Their first kiss was delightful to say the least. Rose s really starting to bloom, if you'll pardon the pun.

Jack alert! I can hardly wait to see where this story goes. It is very intriguing.

I like this better than "..that you're human":
“Hello,” John said, inclining his head towards her. “You look beautiful. Considering.”

“Considering what?” Rose asked, shrinking away from him a bit. Considering her age? Her hair?

“That you look more beautiful every time I see you, so in a matter of minutes how you look now won’t even compare to how you’ll look to me then.” He gave her a sunny grin and offered her his arm. She took it and they headed out the door, the blessing bell jangling over them as if to wish them a good day.


This is so much fun!

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